Heather- The Ants’ Revenge was such a great story. It was so very original that you told it from the perspectives of the ants. I would have never thought to do that. The grammar and spelling was good for the most part but could use one more read through and then it would b excellent. I like how you named certain ants in your story; I think you could better carry out personalization throughout the entire story. You only see it in the beginning. The paragraph separation and story layout is excellent and runs smoothly. The descriptions and details when the ants were underground an holding up their walls were great. I felt that I myself was there with them. Your stories are really coming along great. The font of the story stands out against the background and is easy to read. Great job! I cannot wait to read more of your stories.
Heather- The Ants’ Revenge was such a great story. It was so very original that you told it from the perspectives of the ants. I would have never thought to do that. The grammar and spelling was good for the most part but could use one more read through and then it would b excellent. I like how you named certain ants in your story; I think you could better carry out personalization throughout the entire story. You only see it in the beginning. The paragraph separation and story layout is excellent and runs smoothly. The descriptions and details when the ants were underground an holding up their walls were great. I felt that I myself was there with them. Your stories are really coming along great. The font of the story stands out against the background and is easy to read. Great job! I cannot wait to read more of your stories.
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